At Carpe Diem we have a hokku by Jackie Le Poidevin to complete to form a Tan Renga. After reading Georgia’s at Bastetandsekhmet, I loved her completion and decided to add on to hers. I reread my completion and noticed it seems to fit well alone with Jackie Le Poidevin’s hokku but tells a more complete story with Georgia’s, so here it is:
Bare branches touch
Over the lane where we walk,
Fingers entwined.
© Jackie Le Poidevin
young lovers meet in winter
under bare skeleton trees
each gust of wind
down the sunlit naked lane
invites cuddling © G.s.k. ‘15
safe in our embrace
remnants of Saint Valentine’s
beneath starry skies
big dipper sneaks a peak
of our first kiss © Tournesol ’15
sweet stolen kisses of love
open to the universe
live love embraces
the stars can only envy
young lovers kisses © G.s.k. ‘15
a chill brings us closer
calms trembling forms
so naive we were
was not the chilly breeze
that made us shiver. © Tournesol ‘15
and hot streams flowed intrepid
in the our hidden garden
no winter treed lane
our hands and bodies entwined
we walked together © G.s.k. ‘15
a turtle dove purrs
wishing us eternal love
gazing into
each other’s spellbound eyes
we kissed © Tournesol ‘15
that was thirty years ago
winter has frosted our hair
we walk together
o’er the lane bare branches touch
with fingers entwined © G.s.k. ’15
Tournesol dans un Jardin 
A great piece- before and after 🙂
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Thank you, Chris. It is a coloborative effort…like a tea party but called Tan Renga:)
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Cool … really like how the whole renga reads! Thanks so much for this great opportunity!
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Your completion started it 😉
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But without our hokku master … thee would have been no renga .. wonderful how the collaboration of haijin makes for an interesting poem …
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Yes, indeed, her poetry is beautiful…that prompt allowed me to follow another talented haiku poet…I learn so much better by reading from all of you.
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Well you’ve nothing to envy anyone about .. you’re pretty great yourself!
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I really enjoyed this but I had to look up big dipper – in the UK we call the constellation the plough or great bear. For us a big dipper is a roller coaster!
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The Plough would be an interesting choice here with all our snow:)
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The plough would certainly save space … but we’d write it plow in the U.S. and no one would know what we’re talking about :-D!
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True…I must be aware of that though and write perhaps the greek name in future as a sidenote.
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Could be an idea or just link it to the explanation.
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I’m smiling, oh, I’m smiling at the Big Dipper’s peeking! (Nosy old constellation!)
My Bare Branches Tan Renga
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As long as he doesn’t squeal to Mama Bear 😉
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Reblogged this on Bastet and Sekhmet's Library and commented:
This is one of my favorite “games”: the renga … and as you can see, the collaborative aspect of the renga brings out different nuances that a single poet might miss … a special thanks to Jackie Le Poidevin as our “hokku” master and to Tournesol for this fantastic opportunity.
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It looks like fun doesn’t it…all put together:)
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it not only looks fun …. it reads very well!
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Grazie, cara, j’aime que ça coule bien:)
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