summer souvenirs (haibun)

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After dinner, brother and sister would go to the pier with their mother to fish.  The mother didn’t mind putting the squiggly worm on the hook for them.  He would feel so proud when he got a bite and would reel in his catch, a small gold carp.  Silently (yet beaming) he would unhook the fish and throw it back into the lake to give it a chance to get bigger.

His little sister would through the rod backwards not realizing the hook could catch a human and anyone close by would hide for cover;  she was but five years old and took her fishing seriously…her serious look meant “business” so different than the “laissez-faire” allure of her older brother.

They are nice memories of a long ago, by the lake, together, hearing the catamarans rock, soft waves roll in and feel the tug of a fish bite now and then.

wiggly worm
alluring innocence
gold carp

gold carp
pleads for time
swims to freedom

© Tournesol ’15

Written for: CPHK

Thanking our host and patient mentor at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai for his dedication and tireless commitment to his blog, our prompts and mostly that has allowed me to grow a bit more each day. Merci Chèvrefeuille!

21 responses to “summer souvenirs (haibun)”

  1. afairymind Avatar
    afairymind

    A lovely nostalgic piece. 🙂 My brothers all fished when we were younger – I never could stand putting the worm on the hook!

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      I used to run after my sister (who was screaming) with a worm…haha

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  2. Jen Avatar
    Jen

    Great memories, Tournesol –! The little sister is especially well-characterized in such a short space. 🙂

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      🙂 they are pretty special peeps, now adults.

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    2. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      I had not recognized which Jen you were …our profile pic is cool!!

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      1. Jen Avatar
        Jen

        Thanks —
        phoenix from the flames 🙂

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      2. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
        Tournesol (Clr)

        My grandson’s middle name is Phoenix:) and we are celebrating his 11th birthday tomorrow…well tonight but you know what I mean:)

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      3. Jen Avatar
        Jen

        Great middle name!
        Enjoy the celebrations — 🙂

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      4. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
        Tournesol (Clr)

        thanks then I`m on an overnight bus to a retreat with Amma

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      5. Jen Avatar
        Jen

        Ah, wonderful! 🙂

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  3. Bastet Avatar
    Bastet

    Lovely walking through your memories ma cher!

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      Grazie, cara:)

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      1. Bastet Avatar
        Bastet

        Prego, bella!

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  4. Mark M. Redfearn Avatar
    Mark M. Redfearn

    There’s a fairy-tale quality to the carp begging for time…

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      There is isn’t there…but my son had such a kind heart especially as a child, he just couldn’t keep the fish he caught.

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  5. Forest Tinker (@hamish_gunn) Avatar
    Forest Tinker (@hamish_gunn)

    Another very nice piece of nostalgia from you, dear Tournesol, that we can all relate to somehow, which makes it all the more readable. The haiku fit well..

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      Thanks so much, Hamish, I am pleased it resonates with you.

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  6. Chèvrefeuille Avatar
    Chèvrefeuille

    Sweet memories Cheryl Lynn. Thank you for your kind words …

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      Thanks for your comment, Kristjaan; les éloges pour ton dévouement sont très humbles.

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  7. janicead Avatar
    janicead

    Such wonderful memories of time with children. Thanks for sharing with our haiku family. Beautifully written.

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    1. Tournesol (Clr) Avatar
      Tournesol (Clr)

      Thank you, Janice. Hope you and hubby are well:)

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