winter calls me (jisei – troiku – tanka)

Tournesol dversepoets, Haiku, Photography, tanka, Troiku 2015-09-302015-10-05 1 Minute

(troiku)

trace of autumn
butterfly and bumble bee
lingering

trace of autumn
blossoms resisting
summer’s end

butterfly and bumble bee
hold a secret
the other side

lingering
season closing in
shorter days

soft breeze whistles
golden rays warm my face
life remembered

so much love
mother fed me every day
abundance overflowed
left me plenty
to feed an army

on this muddy path
I walk alone
winter calls me

Written for Dversepoets – Jisei – Death Poem

Published by Tournesol

A little bit about moi: I am a mom, a nana, a sister, a woman, a friend, a human being…a youth counsellor, Family Life Educator. I have been working in the helping profession for over 25 years and volunteered in various capacities from youths to seniors. Tournesol is my nom de plume for haiku and other Japanese form poetry here at Tournesoldansunjardin https://cheryllynnroberts.wordpress.com I hope you enjoy reading through my daily waka. I also have another blog "Stop the Stigma" where I may stand on my soapbox now and then and hope it will become a place to drop in and share or comment on issues important to you. In that vein this could be a great way to learn from each other. http://stigmahursteveryone.wordpress.com View all posts by Tournesol

Published 2015-09-302015-10-05

15 thoughts on “winter calls me (jisei – troiku – tanka)”

readinpleasure says:

2015-09-30 at 17:30

So well written, Oliana. I love the jisei. 🙂

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2015-09-30 at 18:48
  
  Thank you, Celestine. I was not sure how it would turn out since we wrote one already for Carpe Diem but there is always room to ponder on this, isn’t there?
  
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janicead says:

2015-09-30 at 22:07

Beautiful ponderings. Sounds like your nostalgia has crept into the writing.

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2015-10-01 at 01:07
  
  the tanka was definitely thinking of the upcoming year anniversary of Mom`s passing…Dec 2 will be here sooner than I realize.
  
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Bodhirose says:

2015-09-30 at 23:48

Thanks for sharing your link with me, Cheryl-Lynn. There are many images in your troiku that suggest the ending of a life…trace of autumn, season closing, a life remembered, memories of mother. A lovely jisei. I’m glad I got to read it. I’ve never heard of a troiku, but that means nothing, I know there are many forms that I’ve never heard of…now I’m intrigued.
Gayle ~

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2015-10-01 at 00:31
  
  You are too kind, thank you! We had a jisei to do with Carpe Diem earlier, https://cheryllynnroberts.wordpress.com/2015/09/17/late-frost-jisei/ As for the troiku, I linked it to Carpe Diem’s page. Chèvrefeuille created this form. I truly enjoy Troiku and Haibun the most I think…I feel at home with these forms.
  
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  1. Bodhirose says:
    
    2015-10-01 at 00:48
    
    I found Chevrefeuille’s page and remember him from a poetry group we both were members of a few years ago. So I read up on his invented form…it sounds really clever. I’ve written maybe a couple of Haibun, lots of haiku and a few tanka. I really resonate with these short forms too. When done well, they are stunning. However, a Busho, I’m not! 🙂
    
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  2. Cheryl-Lynn says:
    
    2015-10-01 at 00:53
    
    I love Basho too but am enjoying women poets like Jennifer Hu and Fukuda Chiyo-Ni
    
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  3. Bodhirose says:
    
    2015-10-01 at 00:57
    
    Nice. Yes, let’s make room for some women poets.
    
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  4. Cheryl-Lynn says:
    
    2015-10-01 at 01:06
    
    yep, if you search Jennifer Hu, I`ve written three posts inspired by her poems which were so reasonable in e-books.
    
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  5. Bodhirose says:
    
    2015-10-01 at 04:01
    
    Thanks…I’ll check her out. I appreciate that.
    
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lynn__ says:

2015-10-01 at 00:01

Yes, this is worth pondering 🙂 Beautiful troiku and haiku…the tanka feels like it should be separate from the others (imho)

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2015-10-01 at 00:50
  
  thanks, Lynn, you are absolutely right about that tanka but I was not sure how to separate it…I may add stars in between…thanks for that! 🙂
  
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Björn Rudberg (brudberg) says:

2015-10-05 at 18:59

Oh I so remember the troiku.. I love how you have filled it with autumn.. it’s most blessed as a death poem, an I do remember that we did them in Carpe Diem.. too bad I do not have time to be there any longer…

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2015-10-05 at 19:42
  
  Thank you! I’ve missed your poems…I need to add you to my email and not just reader.
  
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