evening train (Troiku)

Haiku, Troiku 1 Minute

Here are three haiku composed by Stevenson all three are about trains and we are to write a haiku trying to stay in the same mood of this sparkling star our host has chosen.

the train picks up speed,
in a paper coffee cup
concentric waves

the river always
out there in the dark
late train home

coming home
on the train
… the backyards

(c) John Stevenson

I’m not sure I stayed in the mood but I tried to also capture moments living by train tracks. I grew up by the train tracks in Farnham, Québec  and the first few years I was married we lived just below the main train station with at least 10 tracks. Needless to say we would hear trains passing through, shunting and changing tracks most nights and we could actually feel the vibrations when trains sped by.  I chose to write a Troiku and tell a brief story at the same time. The Troiku was created by our host, Chévrefeuille.  To see more about this form click here

Farnham, Québec Railway Station – Wikipedia

cooking supper
kitchen window shakes
evening train

cooking supper
called children to the table
train whistles

kitchen window shakes
pot of stew boils over
train screeches

evening train
children squeal with joy
Daddy’s home!

(c) Tournesol ’15

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A little bit about moi: I am a mom, a nana, a sister, a woman, a friend, a human being…a youth counsellor, Family Life Educator. I have been working in the helping profession for over 25 years and volunteered in various capacities from youths to seniors. Tournesol is my nom de plume for haiku and other Japanese form poetry here at Tournesoldansunjardin https://cheryllynnroberts.wordpress.com I hope you enjoy reading through my daily waka. I also have another blog "Stop the Stigma" where I may stand on my soapbox now and then and hope it will become a place to drop in and share or comment on issues important to you. In that vein this could be a great way to learn from each other. http://stigmahursteveryone.wordpress.com

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  2. What a wonderful response Cheryl Lynn on this ‘sparkling stars’ … it’s a joy to see how you’ve managed the Troiku … i am so proud that you’re caught by this haiku variation which i created.

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    1. It is a winner indeed…I find I can express my thoughts almost as well with a troiku as a haibun….I`m writing another now…yes, I`m hooked! 🙂

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  6. Trains are so much interlinked to our lives … we all have stories about them 🙂

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