the annunciation (troiku)

Tournesol Haiku, Photography, Troiku 2016-01-04 1 Minute

At the Secret Keeper, the weekly writing prompts are the following words:

I decided to write a Troiku (a new haiku form created by Chèvrefeuille at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai, one of my favourite waka forms.

The annunciation

(Troiku)

last Christmas Eve
it waits upon a crooked fence
a crow eyes its prey

last Christmas Eve
dark skies meet a mother’s grief
crushed – she must accept

waiting on the crooked fence
a mother’s relentless tears
will never cease

a crow eyes its prey
poor pinky* squeals for mercy
mother’s howl of woe

*pinky = baby mouse

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A little bit about moi: I am a mom, a nana, a sister, a woman, a friend, a human being…a youth counsellor, Family Life Educator. I have been working in the helping profession for over 25 years and volunteered in various capacities from youths to seniors. Tournesol is my nom de plume for haiku and other Japanese form poetry here at Tournesoldansunjardin https://cheryllynnroberts.wordpress.com I hope you enjoy reading through my daily waka. I also have another blog "Stop the Stigma" where I may stand on my soapbox now and then and hope it will become a place to drop in and share or comment on issues important to you. In that vein this could be a great way to learn from each other. http://stigmahursteveryone.wordpress.com View all posts by Tournesol

Published 2016-01-04

7 thoughts on “the annunciation (troiku)”

Janice says:

2016-01-05 at 05:49

I quite enjoyed that Troiku though sad for mother mouse. I love the drama of the clouds in the photo.

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2016-01-05 at 14:25
  
  Thanks so much, Janice! I’m pleased you enjoyed this…you caught the spirit I was feeling when writing this troiku:)
  
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Melinda Kucsera says:

2016-01-05 at 20:39

it’s a dark fairy tale told as a troiku. I love it!

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2016-01-05 at 20:47
  
  Thank you, Melinda.
  
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  1. Melinda Kucsera says:
    
    2016-01-05 at 20:54
    
    you’re welcome 🙂
    
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the secret keeper says:

2016-01-10 at 07:01

The Troiku is an imaginative form with the repetition of the developing lines. If you think of it I would like a detailed description of the rules. Is there a link where I could study this form? You did such an intricate poem as you used the prompt words and use the form with such fascination. Love what you wrote and the new style. – jk

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1. Cheryl-Lynn says:
  
  2016-01-10 at 08:05
  
  Thank you! this form was created by Chèvrefeuille (our host and mentor) at Carpe Diem Haiku Kai; here is the link of his explanation http://chevrefeuillescarpediem.blogspot.ca/p/troiku-new-form-of-haiku.html
  
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