wistfully
stirring her cup of tea,
milk curdles
~
weeping salty tears,
pillow case no longer
carries his scent
or
weeping
on a pillow case,
scents lost
Carpe Diem Special # 113, Shiba Sonome’s 4th “longing for someone”
Poetry ~ Waka
wistfully
stirring her cup of tea,
milk curdles
~
weeping salty tears,
pillow case no longer
carries his scent
or
weeping
on a pillow case,
scents lost
Carpe Diem Special # 113, Shiba Sonome’s 4th “longing for someone”
very strong emotions vivid in your well penned haiku ~
artmusedog and carol (A Creative Harbor)
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Thank you, I’m pleased you felt the emotions:)
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Losing the scent in the pillowcase — really hit me in the gut. Powerful memories … powerful emotions ….
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That was actually only a year ago…probably the only one that I loved his scent…ah, my shining black knight:)
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He sounds *much* more interesting than those knights in shining white armor.
I am very sorry — yes, it’s been a year — but still, I am sorry.
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The first haiku so well-composed. Really art, and the second grows on one as a reader – very feminine haiku, well-written, and shows me how scents are so important for a woman. I noticed that before – endearing.
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I like the first one best too. I write like a crazed person at my break at work…but the second is unpolished but was so important for me to share that moment; what do you think of:
weeping,
lost scents of
a pillow case
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You write like a crazed person? Nothing crazy about the longings expressed in these little gems…
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In the longing are the memories…so it is bittersweet:) Thanks so much for your kind words!
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The first one is really stellar.. the curdling milk is such a strong signal.
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Thank you, I like that one too but not the floating curds…;)
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The scent on the pillow case evokes the loss. Very nice !
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It really does! thank you for reading and taking the time to comment.
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ah … so shattering when his scent is gone …. great sequence.
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Knowing what I know now, I promise IF there is a next time, I am putting the pillow case in a freezer bag 🙂
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lol … 😀
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