Plop interuptus (haiku)

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Our host at Heeding Haiku with Chèvrefeuille at MindLoveMiserysMenagerie has asked us to rewrite this famous haiku by the master, Matsuo Basho

furu ike ya / kawazu tobi komu / mizu no oto

old pond
a frog jumps into
the sound of water

© Basho (Tr. Jane Reichhold)

A description of the surroundings when Basho experienced this moment, by the old pond were Japanese yellow roses (yamabuki) growing around the pond.  Here is my rewrite.

Yamabuki (Yellow Roses, Kerria Japonica)

scent of roses
by the old pond
frog plops

© Tournesol ’15

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13 responses to “Plop interuptus (haiku)”

  1. Bastet Avatar
    Bastet

    LOL … I heard him!

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    1. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
      Cheryl-Lynn

      Haha:)

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  2. julespaige Avatar
    julespaige

    When I think of plop….well it is along the lines of little bunny pellets…after they enjoyed carrots.
    But the sound of the frog into the water… that also works.

    We are where we need to be.

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    1. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
      Cheryl-Lynn

      Maybe I was thinking of the huge bullfrog in the river where I grew up 🙂

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      1. julespaige Avatar
        julespaige

        I also think of that American commercial of ‘Speedy’

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      2. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
        Cheryl-Lynn

        🙂

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      3. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
        Cheryl-Lynn

        That brought me back…boy oh boy!!

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  3. janicead Avatar
    janicead

    Plop! Love it!

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    1. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
      Cheryl-Lynn

      haha, I searched for a another word but that is what is sounds like 🙂

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  4. Chèvrefeuille Avatar
    Chèvrefeuille

    Beautifully revised Cheryl Lynn

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    1. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
      Cheryl-Lynn

      thanks so much, Kristjaan:)

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  5. readinpleasure Avatar
    readinpleasure

    A great revision. 🙂

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    1. Cheryl-Lynn Avatar
      Cheryl-Lynn

      Thanks, Celestine:)

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